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Today much of the food people eat gets imported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, there are
farms
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 and lands where products are grown located far away from the cities.
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 it demands much more finance for transportation, it makes the city looks more modernized and urbanization can develop without barriers.
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, animals in
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 do not be affected by the emission of cars in
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residential area,
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, the quality of
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 be higher. In modern society where transportation has been improved, the service’s cost is times higher than in the past, so it makes the discount rate higher. People should spend most of their income on
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 because the price of fuel rises a lot.
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, fruits from tropical countries are more expensive,
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 the transportation fee being included.
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, it is not as big a problem as the consequences of
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 in the city. In terms of urbanization,
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 require an enormous field to care for animals and the production process which plays a role in the quality of
food
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. Urban areas are fulfilled by humans and their needs which makes megapolises more polluted, so it can harm the health of animals of
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 in residential areas. Because the emission from factories and cars constitutes most of their air.
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, in Pekin where a lot of factories work, there are no possibilities to produce healthy
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.
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, China is considered one of the most developed countries with numerous skyscrapers. 
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, despite the transport expenditure on
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 , it is much more profitable to have
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 located far away from the city, since the standard of
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 will not change and urbanization will not face any problems in terms of visuality.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Imported food
  • Locally sourced
  • Carbon footprint
  • Global trade
  • Economic impact
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary diversity
  • Local agriculture
  • Food security
  • Quality standards
  • Environmental issues
  • Transport emissions
  • Seasonal availability
  • Health risks
  • Global supply chain
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