Once children enter school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social developments than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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1920 and 2020. It can be clearly manifested that the rural areas of
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the sawary

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sawary
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has
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been converted into
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an urban

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area and new amenities are added in
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the sawary

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sawary
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a petrol

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yang
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the yang

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office complex. The first and foremost
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between 1920 to 2020,Tulebug Bros cannery was converted into the modern yang office complex .In order to cross the Elmwood river new bridge was constructed.
Prestwich
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A prestwich

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primary school has been shifted to another place and it was far bigger than before.
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, in the location of the old school a new
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loco

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petrol pump was constructed.The new apartment,
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houses

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and shops have been built across
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avenue.
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,the bike path has been introduced along the river by replacing the old beach.Interestingly we cannot find any changes In
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Miller's lake it is still similar to before.
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the more
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accommodation
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accomodation
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facilities
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,facilities

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peoples
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people

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are living now in
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salary

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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