The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts and the table give
layout
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the layout
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of the police
budget
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for 2017 and 2018 in one area in
the
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apply
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Freat
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Britain. The pie charts illustrate how the police
budget
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was spent
while
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the table shows where that
budget
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came from.
Overall
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, in
both
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years
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, most of the
money
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came from
national
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the national
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goverment
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government
and more than half
it
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in
both
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years
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was used for salaries. In
both
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years
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nearly two third of the entire
budget
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was supported by the
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goverment
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government
. The total
budget
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for 2017 was almost 304m 175.5 of which came from the national
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goverment
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government
. for 2018, the total number was 318m which is
almsot
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almost
14 million more than the previous year, 177m of the whole
money
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was contributed
from
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the
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goverment
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government
. The least amount of contribution was by other sources, nearly 38m in
both
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years
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. Most of the
money
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was spent
for
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on
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officers
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officers'
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salary
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in 2017 and 2018. The percentage
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however
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, differed
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75% was spent for salary purposes in 2017 but 69% in 2018, forming a 6% difference. The least amount of
money
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was spent
for
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technology. In 2017 only 8% of the
money
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was spent
for
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tech
porposes
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purposes
and going forward to the next year, it increased to 14% which is twice as more.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, both, years, money, goverment, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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