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Travelling in group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, some
people
 think that
travel
 in a
group
 is the best way to approach new places.
In my
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 opinion, I completely disagree with
this
 statement because you are restricted by the tour guide's company and
as well as
 you did not experience the new culture. First that all, when you are travelling in a
group
 usually the
travel
 company book everything for you, so you do not have to do much.
However
,
this
 limited the places you would like to go and you have to follow what the
travel
 company have planned for you.
In addition
, that limited the place you will have to go if you were by yourself.
For instance
, I went on a
group
 tour to mount blanc for 4 days with my partner, which was quite disappointing because we want to go to one place that was not on the route and they did not allow us. Anyway will have to come back by ourselves, so will be able to take our own route.
Secondly
, how you are going to different parts of the country with other
people
 will affect your interactions with locals. One side of
travel
 is to know different cultures one of the best ways to do
that is
 by talking to the local
people
.
On the other hand
,
while
 you are exploring with a
group
 of
people
 you tend to speak more with them than the local
people
 from the place you are visiting.
For example
, I went to Indonesia by myself I stayed with a local family from Bali. I was able to get knowledge about the culture from them. That information helps me to understand better their culture which is important for me and other
people
 who like travels. In conclusion, some
people
 believe going abroad in a
group
 can be a better experience for them. In my opinion, I do not share the same point of view because can be highly restrictive and you are not able to experience other cultures completely.
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