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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following bar chart illustrates the rates of the total world
population
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 in four different countries in 1950 and 2002 and the expectation for 2050.
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, it can be clearly seen that in 1950, China was the most populated country in comparison with the other countries,
while
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 Japan was the least populated country.
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, the USA had the same percentage in 2002 and 2050.
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, the
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 of India has been increasing since 1950.
On the other hand
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, Between 2002 and 2050 there is a significant growth in China’s
population
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 as it went from 15
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percent
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 to 20
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percent
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. Meanwhile, the percentage of Japan has been falling through the given, period as it hit approximately 2
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 in 2050.
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, in the USA the
population
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 fell in 1950 but in the next few
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 it remained stable. India had its lowest rate in 1950 which is 15
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percent
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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