Recently, the retail company you work for has been losing customers to a competitor. The company is setting up a scheme to encourage customers to stay with the company. Your boss has asked you to write a letter to the customers on your database outlining this customer loyalty scheme. Write the letter to your customers: •describing the benefits for customers of the loyalty scheme •explaining what customers must do to join the scheme •giving details of a special promotion to launch the scheme • reminding customers of the quality of your goods.

Dear Sir My name is Vy. I'm a co-worker from the BBC company. I'm writing to let you know that
this
customer loyalty scheme will organize on 23, Mel street on 13, march, 2023. I would like to tell you about some benefits of
this
program.
Firstly
, we have a new product line and send it to you for trial free.
Besides
that, we have some special gifts for loyal
customers
.
Secondly
, we have a concert for grateful when you stay with us since the company started the business.
This
celebration holds on and saves the memories for us. I would like to overview and give some details about the event.
Firstly
, we need to introduce our company.
Secondly
, we have music.
Finally
, we will talk about a new product line. The new product line will release market on the next month. We would like to bring out the best in
customers
and help
customers
to have a better life. It's good quality and helps
customers
detox and
release
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releases
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bad things from their
body
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bodies
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. I hope you can join us and I'm looking forward to hearing from you. Please let me know if you join
this
program as I attached the file below. Thanks and regards Vy Nguyen
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