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Studying art in schools improves studrnt's performance in other subjects ,because it is easier for multi_skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

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Learning forms an essential part of society. Schools that teach
art
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promotes
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 their
pupils
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 performance in other subjects as these
skills
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 assist
students
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 in learning new information;
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,
art
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 should be mandatory in schools. It is agreed that
students
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 should have artistic studies at school to develop various
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 to
facitlitate
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facilitate
 learning.
Arts
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 and crafts can assist young minds in the development of
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executive cognitive functions.
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such
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 as
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, critical thinking and time management are essential in solving math problems and
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performing
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similarily
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, these are the exact
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 to produce an
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 piece. A study conducted by
neuroscientist
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neuroscientists
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 at Melbourne University confirms children use the same cognitive capacity to draw a picture of a house as they would to solve a mathematical equation. Indeed, creativity stimulates essential
skills
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 in young minds. The expression of emotions and thoughts can
also
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 be invaluable for
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 throughout the creative process, for children rarely have the tools to verbally express their feelings or
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describe
 what is on their mind;
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, youngsters
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 a medium that can support learning those
skills
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. Linguistic
arts
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,
such
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 as poetry, can equip children to not only give
expression
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 of emotions
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 but
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 develop language and understanding of psychosocial being.
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, the enhancement of learning
art
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 can directly translate to new
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. In conclusion, it is true that
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needs
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 education that includes the
studing
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studying
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 of
arts
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 as it contributes to both their mental development and emotional growth.
Goverments
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Governments
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 should consider making
arts
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 mandatory in all school
ciriculums
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curriculums
curriculum
.

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