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Parents should not pressure their children to choose particular profession. Young people should have the freedom to choose path they like. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Parents
 should not pressure their
children
 to choose
particular
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 profession. Young
people
 should have the freedom to choose
path
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the path
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 they like. To what
extend
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 do you agree or disagree? Nowadays every individual has a right to choose what is good or bad for them.
While
 some believe that young
people
 should be encouraged to
dicede
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decide
 the path they desire freely, others oppose
this
 idea. I
am strongly agree
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strongly agree
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 that everyone can choose the right path for themselves. Why I choose
this
 way, I will explain in my essay. Choosing a career is a critical and crucial decision for a large number of young
people
 themselves. But some
parents
 want to make their dreams come true of having the perfect job through their child.
For instance
,
some
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in some
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country's
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countries
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parents
 take a decision on
adolescents
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adolescents'
adolescent's
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 future goals which
further
cause
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causes
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 the problem of less independence in the youth.
This
 is can prevent young
people
 from being independent and free in society.
In addition
 to
above
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the above
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parents
 should strive to create an environment that encourages
children
's talents and passions. To put it simply,
parents
 expect their
children
 to live well and
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be happy
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happy
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happily
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 and build a bright future for them.
However
, in my opinion, it is unwise to accept
parents
'
arrangement
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arrangements
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.
Also
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,Also
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 it takes freedom away from
children
. In a
nutshell
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,nutshell
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 every citizen can make up their own life
by
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through
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 their own struggles and successes. Plumping someone's life is not an appropriate decision as it can take someone's privilege too.
To sum up
, I definitely believe that
parents
 should avoid pressuring their
children
 to follow specific career paths. Young
people
 need
the
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apply
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freedom and parental support in
the
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their
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 future career.
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