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Task 1 Academic: The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.

Task 1 Academic: The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.
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The graph illustrates the volume of
cheese
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 consumption in four different countries from 1980 to 2020. The units were measured in kilograms.
Overall
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, there was a gradual increase in Wales and Northern Ireland
while
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 England and Scotland experienced a downward trend.
However
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, England has the largest volume of
cheese
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 consumers. In 1980, England was recorded as having the highest
cheese
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 consumption which started at around 110
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 and gradually decreased to 100
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 in 2000 until reached roughly 80
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 in 2020. Scotland was ranked as the second where purchased
cheese
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 around 80
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initially
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 and hit a ceiling of around 110
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 in the next ten years
then
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 slightly declined by approximately 58
Kg
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 throughout the period.
On the other hand
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, the others two countries experienced steady growth. At the beginning of time, the number of
cheese
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 buyers in Walse was about 45
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 and slowly went up to 70
Kg
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 in 2000.
Likewise
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, there was a slight increase in Northern Ireland rising from 12
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 in 1890 to 30
Kg
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 in 2000 and was followed by a dramatic rise of 60
Kg
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 throughout the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cheese, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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