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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
People have different views about the reasons
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 studying foreign languages.
While
 a group believe that
traveling
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 or finding jobs may be the main cause of it, some others think it can have other causes. I argue that it depends on a lot of motives. On the one hand numbers of folk say that trying to know another
language
 is in order to
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 to overseas for a trip or to find a job. It is a big challenge for everyone to have a good job or hobby, in his country or even, one
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 country. For working or
traveling
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to
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abroad you have to know their communication ways to don’t face
by
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problems. So, it is clear to understand their
language
.
On the other hand
, a lot of folks are believed that there are
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vast reasonable issues to study linguistic subjects. For a shining example continuing education
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overseas or trading and finding a bigger market for a company
production
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 can be some strong reasons to learn
another languages
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another language
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. In my
opinion
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 Nowadays mankind
are
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 in communication with each other in different points of the world. So the motivations of
learn
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foreign
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language
 may be a wide spectrum of causes.
To sum up
, I say that it is true that
two
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 main
reason
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 for studying a
language
 maybe are
journey
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a journey
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 or finding
job
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a job
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, but there are numerous points in
this
 issue like education, marriage, trading and business and making easy connections with people abroad that we can mention.
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  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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