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Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extents do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people believe that
women
 should focus more on raising
children
 and less on their working life because they are more gifted at childcare than
men
. I cannot entirely agree with
this
 statement and will give some reasons in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with,
men
 and
women
 are equally responsible for household duties
as well as
children
.
Although
 some think that females are more patient and detailed, which could raise
children
 better than males, they still have many
men
 who want to care for kids and be househusbands even better than
women
.
Therefore
, both
men
 and
women
 should share a household where both parents share
this
 responsibility in society.
On the other hand
,
women
 spent almost all of their time caring for
children
 and the household in order to help
men
 look after their home, which let
men
 concentrate on work wholeheartedly and not worry about things at home in the past.
However
, with the rise of feminism consciousness, the female started to have their own business and no longer be housewives. More and more
women
 become successful in the working field and even do well than some
men
.
This
 a clear proof that
women
 have the same ability as
men
 in working place in
this
 generation. Being a householder or a worker should not have gender restrictions. In conclusion, in spite of some humans still thinking that taking care of housing and kids is the responsibility of females, the modern world is changing and both genders do well in working and duty of childcaring.
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