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The table shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries.

The table shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries.
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The table illustrates the percentile figures for women in the workforce and
in
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at
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managerial
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the managerial
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 level in five countries including
Australia
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,
Egypt
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, Sri Lanka, Japan and
United
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the United
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States
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.
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, it can be clearly seen that the proportion of female workers in all nations
are
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 consistent, except for
Egypt
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. Regarding women as managers, the highest number is found in
Australia
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 and
United
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the United
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States
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, and the opposite is true for other countries. In terms of
female
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the female
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labor
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labour
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 force, Japan stands at
highest
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 position with 48%, followed by
United
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the United
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States
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 with 46%. The data in
Australia
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 and Sri Lanka are identical at 42%.
The
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 exceptional case is found in
Egypt
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 where male workers are fivefold female
ones
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apply
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.
In
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At
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managerial
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the managerial
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 level,
while
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 in
Australia
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 and
United
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the United
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States
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, the number of female managers
are
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is
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 nearly the same
with
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 that of men, at 43%, in
Egypt
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 and Sri Lanka, only one-tenth of women are working at
this
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 level. In the meantime, Japanese female bosses make up 17% of the
labor
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labour
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 force.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, egypt, states with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Labor force
  • Management
  • Proportion
  • Gender gap
  • Leadership roles
  • Workforce participation
  • Variance
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural influences
  • Legal framework
  • Education
  • Maternity leave
  • Workplace discrimination
  • Career progression
  • Gender equality
  • Organizational policies
  • Case study
  • Representation
  • Strategies
  • Disparities
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