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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart
give
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gives
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 information about journey
why
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and why
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 humans journey to
job
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the job
a job
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 by bicycle or by car. It is
clearly
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clear
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 that
two
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the two
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 charts illustrate to about compare
traveling
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travelling
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 tools during
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the period
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period
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periods
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 of
work
.
Moreover
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,Moreover
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 pie charts have
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especially
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specially
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special
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 advantages and disadvantages,
for
example
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,example
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travellling
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travelling
 by
bcyling
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bicycling
have
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has
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impact
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an impact
the impact
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to
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on
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 the environment and spend less cost than other vehicles so no problems
at
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in
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 the parking area, faster than driving , impact your health for the reason cycling
more
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is more
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 popular exercise in whole sport species.
Meanwhile
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,Meanwhile
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 car driving
have
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has
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 comfort, distance to
work
, safer than cycling, faster than cycling and
need
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the need
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 to carry things to
work
 but
this
 situation
depend
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depends
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 on
professional
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a professional
the professional
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 level.
Reason
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The reason
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 for cycling has
high
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a high
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 rate
in
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of
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 less pollution and health and fitness same number
30
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of 30
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% percentage.
While
reason
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the reason
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 for driving to
work
 huge promotion in comfort distance to
work
 40%,
21
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and 21
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% respectively.
Nevertheless
 cycling to
work
 tiny rate
in
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is
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 faster than cycling,
safer
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and safer
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 than cycling need to carry things to
work
14
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at 14
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%,14%,
11
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and 11
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% respectively.
On the other hand
 travel cycling to
work
 faster than driving, low costs, no parking problems 12%,13%,15%
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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