The graph below shows the changes in production (millions) of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010.

The graph below shows the changes in

production (millions) of three products in a

garment factory from 1990 to 2010.
The line chart depicts the alteration in creating fibres which were categorized into six sources and surveyed between 1990 to 2010 quinquennially.
Overall
, all of the contributors indicated upward trends which were linear with the proportion of the population,
whereas
only the production of cotton had a downward tendency. In detail, the number of polyesters was approximately 15
tonnes
in 1970,
then
this
trend began to shoot up to 20
tonnes
in 1980, and continued to above 70
tonnes
in 2015. Other categories,
such
as non-cotton cellulosic, polyamides, polypropylene and other sources
also
followed a similar pattern, which had a gradual rose from all over the period. 100
tonnes
in the other sources illustrated the highest number in
this
report, which was depicted in 2015.
On the other hand
, the proportion of cotton fluctuated slightly, which was only for around 11
tonnes
in the first year
,
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and experienced to increase gradually to 13
tonnes
in 1990. Unfortunately,
this
pattern did not
last
long
,
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and experienced to decrease,
then
rose again until the
last
period which was 15
tonnes
.
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