Some people think that child care centres provide the best services for children of pre school age.other working parents think that family members such as grand parents will be better careers for their kids.discuss both views and give your opinion.

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era of globalisation, some individuals believe that childcare
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centers
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are the best place for
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kids
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while
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others think that grandparents are the brilliant choice
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looking
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after their
children
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. From my personal point of view, childcare
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centers
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introduced
children
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to
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veriety
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variety
of activities and knowledge.
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,
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essay will
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elaborate
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views and
thus
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will lead to a logical conclusion. In regard
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the first statement, daycare
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centers
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enhance
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knowledge and
creativities
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at
young
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a young
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age.
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institution
offer
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a mix of education, care and recreational programs to suit
children
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of different ages.
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, most of these
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centers
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provided indoor and outdoor areas
as well as
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sufficient
equipments
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equipment
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for
kids
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to perform their daily activities.
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,
parents
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don't have to worry since their
children
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will
busy
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with their own
schedule
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and have proper care
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the staffs
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staffs
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there.
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, some parties support that
parents
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are
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should be looking after their
kids
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also
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and also
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have their own points. As the
children
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's kidnapping rate
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increase
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in the past decades,
parents
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were
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hesitated to let their
toodlers
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toddlers
in other's
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.
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, in Malaysia, most
of
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kidnapping
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the kidnapping
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cases
are
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happen
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at
the
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apply
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childcare
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centers
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because the
villians
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villains
are looking for an organ to sell.
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,
parents
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are afraid that these unwanted situations might
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their offspring's life.
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, every
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parents
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want the best for their heirs.
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, the ideal solution for their
kids
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is by letting their own relative
to
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take care of them since they are more familiar
and
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with and
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reduce the chance of getting kidnap by strangers or being mistreated by
nursery's
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nursery
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workers.
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