Some countries have legal ages at which people can drink. Other countries believe not have strict laws is a better policy. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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In some
region
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of the world, limitations have been done for using alcohol in terms of users’
age
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while
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other
countries
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do not
use
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laws
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about
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subject.
Age
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limitations may be beneficial to young individuals in favour of preventing
harms
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of alcohol and delaying probable drinking habits in the future. Avoiding strict rules about
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case may bring in
reduction
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of using of alcohol among young people too. On the one hand, these regulations may give benefits in some regions. Many young individuals start to drink at
early
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age
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they would become an addict in certain regions of the world.
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, they may involve some crimes. Especially, South American
countries
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have suffered
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kinds of affairs and they have found a solution with some legislation.
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, many Asian states are applying these
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to delay early addiction among the young. In short, these restraining
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are reasonable for many
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due to
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these causes.
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, some
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give profits as they do not
use
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restrictions in terms of
drinking
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the drinking
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age
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. Even though
,
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freedom in
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use
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the use
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of
alcohols
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alcohol
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in terms of
age
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seems to be dangerous, authorities recognized that in
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situation,
alcohols
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alcohol
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had been out of focus in
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of the young in the long term. These cases had happened in North Europe and Canada and they have decided to continue these kinds of applications.
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, giving freedom
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use
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of
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these drinks may create more significant impacts in certain
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.
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, causes and examples can be multiplied with
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discussion.
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, freeing from some
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bring
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beneficial effects in some
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, in my opinion, regulations should be done about drinking
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possible future dangers among the youth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal drinking age
  • Underage drinking
  • Health repercussions
  • Addiction
  • Drunk-driving
  • Responsible drinking
  • Forbidden fruit
  • Social rituals
  • Public health
  • Safety framework
  • Risks of alcohol
  • Cultural differences
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