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You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: • Introduce yourself • Explain the situation • Say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about
problem
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 with the
camera
 flash which I bought on 10th
march
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March
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 in your store. During the day I study at university, and at night I
work
 as a photographer. My
work
also
 has it is own difficulties like others. When I took the photos with a lump, they were qualitatively perfect.
Then
 after an hour
camera
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 stopped
to
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work
. Earnings have not decreased slowly.
Camera
 which I bought
thise
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this
these
 model
Sony
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 X3 Pro. When bought
camera
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the camera
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sales
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the sales
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 manager
sayed
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 me that everything
works
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 fine with the
camera
 no problems. I believed these words and on
this
 day flash didn't
work
. Despite the fact that I
contracted
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 the store 5 days ago
but
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there is no result. I request an immediate replacement
camera
 and expect a reply. I am sorry that
this
not
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 the
convenience
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of
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the
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reason and do not spoil your nerves for it. Yours faithfully, Savriyev Sukhrob
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task response
Make sure to clearly address all the points given in the task prompt. Include details about the problems with the camera and the action you would like the company to take.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure a more formal and appropriate greeting and closing for a letter to a company representative (Dear Sir/Madam, Sincerely, etc.)

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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