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The diagram provides information about two genders whose ages were 11-14 and engaged in extreme

sports

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in the UK in 2003. In general, the average

the

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apply

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total amount irrespective of gender who joined in different extreme

sports

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was all over 10 per

cent

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whereas

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snowboarding was the only exception with 6.1 per

cent

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the data supplied rollerblading was the five sport with the highest total average at 26.6 per

cent

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. Especially, it was the highest

participation

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in five extreme

sports

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of female participants around 31.7 per

cent

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, which was at least twice as high as the percentages of the other

sports

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. Skateboarding, mountain climbing, snowboarding and mountain biking followed with 13.8, 9.3, 4.0 and 13.3 per

cent

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respectively. Meanwhile, the

participation

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of males

attended

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who attended

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this

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sport with 21.7

per

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apply

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cent

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, and the number of participants only less than women in the five

sports

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Moreover

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the

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apply

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participation

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irrespective of gender in snowboarding was the lowest under 10 per

cent

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However

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, the number of male participants

were

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was

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twice

over

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that of female.

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a similar amount of

participation

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between male and female were mountain climbing each at 10.6 and 9.3 per

cent

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

192 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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