Some cities have few controls over design and construction on housing and office building. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the disadvantage outweigh advantage?

The diagram provides information about two genders whose ages were 11-14 and engaged in extreme
sports
in the UK in 2003. In general, the average
the
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total amount irrespective of gender who joined in different extreme
sports
was all over 10 per
cent
,
whereas
snowboarding was the only exception with 6.1 per
cent
.
According to
the data supplied rollerblading was the five sport with the highest total average at 26.6 per
cent
. Especially, it was the highest
participation
in five extreme
sports
of female participants around 31.7 per
cent
, which was at least twice as high as the percentages of the other
sports
. Skateboarding, mountain climbing, snowboarding and mountain biking followed with 13.8, 9.3, 4.0 and 13.3 per
cent
respectively. Meanwhile, the
participation
of males
attended
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this
sport with 21.7
per
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cent
, and the number of participants only less than women in the five
sports
.
Moreover
,
the
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participation
irrespective of gender in snowboarding was the lowest under 10 per
cent
.
However
, the number of male participants
were
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twice
over
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that of female.
Next,
a similar amount of
participation
between male and female were mountain climbing each at 10.6 and 9.3 per
cent
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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