As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that big corporates should not only make money

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must have duties towards society,

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essay totally agrees with

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statement, I believe that the aim of a business should be beyond just making

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. First of all, we are all aware that companies already pay

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amount

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of taxes to governments ;

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, that doesn't mean that their duty to society is

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, companies should help local and close societies, especially those where the majority of their labour come from and

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evenutally

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, will benefit the company in the long run,

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, if the corporate

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in the

repairements

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requirements

of roads and help in the built of some facilities,

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will not only satisfy the local individuals, but

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employers will have the sense that they are working for a higher cause which will make even work harder and be more productive and

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, the company will get higher income.

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businesses'

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owners should initiate

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cooperation

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with local

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to improve life in rural areas, those places have deficiencies in many fields and

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, life there is difficult and locals suffer;

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, big corporates should start building factories there to create job opportunities for people, and

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provide them with

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transportation

so it would be easier for them to come to work.

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, Local

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face problems

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building roads and other facilities

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the lack of

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that the majority of companies possess, giving a hand on

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will have a positive impact on those projects.

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, there are convincing arguments both for and

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businesses' social responsibilities;

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, I believe that

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have a lot of duties towards society.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

282 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Social responsibilities
Corporate social responsibility
Ethical behavior
Societal impact
Stakeholders
Profit-driven
Public perception
Environmental sustainability
Community development
Human rights
Workplace safety
Altruism
Balanced approach
Accountability
Consumer loyalty

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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Governments should speand money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people say that a country should produce food locally, while others believe that it is good to import food. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

Some working parents think that childcare centres provide the best care for children who are still too young to go to school. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their children.

Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the advantages and disadvantages that bring to them

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.