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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the highest 10
countries
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 in electricity
production
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 and consumption in the year 2014. 
Overall
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, it can be seen that China and America were positioned at the top ranks in the amount of both
production
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 and consumption compared to the other
countries
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. 
Firstly
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, China reported close numbers on both sides reaching more than 5000
billion
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kWh
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. America, in comparison, showed a gap of about 1200
billion
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kWh
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 in the
production
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 movement reaching 4099
billion
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kWh
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.
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, the
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 ranking
third,
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fourth and fifth showed close numbers in
production
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 ranging between 1000-870
billion
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kWh
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.
However
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, they varied in the consumption rate by 200
billion
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kWh
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 gaps between each of them. Meanwhile, for the
last
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 five
countries
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, they represented near
record
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records
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 that
vary
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varies
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 from about 600- 480
billion
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kWh
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 in producing electricity, and a noticeable closeness average of about 450
billion
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kWh
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 in the consuming rates.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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