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the graph below shows the average carbon dioxide emiision per person in the countries uk,sweden, italy and portugal between 1967-2007

the graph below shows the average carbon dioxide emiision per person in the countries uk,sweden, italy and portugal between 1967-2007
The figure above illustrates the discharge of carbon dioxide
gas
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 by each person in the respective countries United Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal for five consecutive years. The information is detailed over a graph with
two
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 axes horizontal and vertical axis.
Overall
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, emissions of
gas
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 had mentioned in terms of metric
tonnes
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 on the left axis and the five consecutive years ie; 1967,1977,1987,1997 and 2007 are mentioned on the parallel line. There is a total of 4 countries which are represented with different lines in
this
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 chart. The United Kingdom was the highest with almost (11 metric
tonnes
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) among all to release out the co2
whereas
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 Portugal remained the least producer with about (1.5 metric
tonnes
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) in the year 1967. The no. for the
two
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 nations
Sweden
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 and Italy comes to almost equal ie;(7 metric
tonnes
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) in 1987.
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, In 2007,
Sweden
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 and Portugal discharged almost the same amount of
gas
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 (6.7 metric
tonnes
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).
Sweden
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 showed a spike in 1977 with around (11 metric
tonnes
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) and a drop in its rate by almost (7metric
tonnes
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) in the year 1987. The end result shows that the excretion of
gas
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 for
two
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 countries (United Kingdom,
Sweden
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) got reduced but for the other
two
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 nations (Italy, Portugal) it stayed totally opposite by the year 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, sweden, two, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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