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The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years.

The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years.
#show #information #energy #production #country #two #years
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This
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 picture shows a contrast between 1995 and 2005 in the representation of the
shares
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share
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production
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 of different
energy
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 products. Generally, we can see that ranks of proportions stay the same, with gas and coal staying
first,
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nuclear and other
last
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, and metro standing third. In comparison with 1995, 2005 is
a
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apply
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lager
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larger
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 in the first two categories by a narrow margin, approximately 1%. On the other, hand petrol shows a different trend and becomes considerably smaller almost at 10 %.
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,
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production
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the production
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 of nuclear and other energies
also
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 substantially grow and grow by nearly 10 %. The most popular element in 1995 is coal and it is 7 times as large as the “other”
energy
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 product group. The proportion of
production
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 of
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this
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these
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energy
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 groups changes almost twice and becomes only approximately 3 times higher.
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, with all
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this
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these
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 slight changes the graph by 2005 represents the same situation
on
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in
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 markets for
energy
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production
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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