You had applied to City College recently, now the college has written back saying the course you applied for is full and they have even suggested an alternative course. In your letter:- - Why did you choose the first course? - Your views on the suggested second course - Your plan of action

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Dear Sir Thank you for responding to me as quickly as possible and helping me to find an alternative

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we living 21 century.

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and adapt to develop my career path.

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, he had an impressive background. I was hoping it will open next

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. I will follow your suggestion to register for the program. I'm waiting to learn the Machine Learning

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. I think the AI

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, I will learn it for

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. If you have any questions, feel free to let me know. Thanks and regards Vy

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You had applied to City College recently, now the college has written back saying the course you applied for is full and they have even suggested an alternative course. In your letter:- - Why did you choose the first course? - Your views on the suggested second course - Your plan of action

Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Othe people think that in today's world subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both points and give your opinion

when we meet someone for the firt time , we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. is this a good thing or a bad thing?

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Although many people value public parks, this space could be better used for the other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and build economics. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.