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The rise of convenience food helped people keep up with the speed of modern life. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages overweigh the disadvantages?

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 modern world ,
ready to eat
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ready-to-eat
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food
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 is helping to survive smoothly
instead
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 of having
busier
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a busier
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 lifestyle, but
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 approach
bringing
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brings
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 more negative effects as compared to
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onespositive
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.
First
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 and foremost disadvantage is
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that
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preserved
food
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 is dangerous for
body
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the body
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 because it is kept stored for
longer
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a longer
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 period of
time
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 which could
effect
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affect
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 on digestive
system
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such
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 as pain,indigestion ,abdominal bloating and vomiting are the common
smyptoms
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symptoms
 of abdominal infection ;
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, chronic infection can
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effects
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 the vital organ of
body
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the body
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 .
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, one of my
friend
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 used to eat
outsided
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outside
food
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 because of having less
time
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 for
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the prepation
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prepation
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preparation
 of
food
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 ,but by eating regularly now he is suffering
chronic
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a chronic
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 abdominal infection.
Inaddition
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In addition
, another negative side is it promotes less family interaction because in the past people used to cook and enjoy
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together
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themselves together
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 with the family,
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 nowadays, everyone just
try
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 to enjoy
alone
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themselves alone
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 ;
therefore
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,there is more barrier
could
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that could
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 be seen in families ,
also
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 less affection, love ,care
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 support. on the positive side,
its
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 more
convient
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convenient
 to buy
food
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 busier schedule because nowadays both men and women are employees, they have to work from early morning to till evening
time
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 and children are busier to get success in
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 competitive era .
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, yesterday
i
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I
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 was preparing for my presentation for my final year,
i
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I
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 was busy for
whole
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the whole
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 day
could
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and could
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 not get
time
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 for cooking
food
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 .I ordered
food
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 through
skip
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 the dishes in just
few
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a few
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 seconds. In conclusion,
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I nodoubt
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nodoubt
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no doubt
,
its
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is
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 very easy to
affroad
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afford
offroad
food
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 in
this
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 modern, but
this
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 brings more negative effects like health issues and more family issues .The only
postive
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positive
 side is
its
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it's
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 just easily available.

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