The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
A glance at the graph given reveals the global usage of
water
from 1900 to 2000. Whereas
, the table shows the amount of water
consumption
in Brazil
and Congo in 2000. Overall
, it is apparent that all the sectors of worldwide water
use
increase
over the period with farming as the highest sector in global Wrong verb form
increased
water
use
. Meanwhile, Brazil
had much more personal water
consumption
than Congo.
Looking at the line chart, in 1900, agriculture
Correct article usage
the agriculture
sector
Change noun form
sector's
use
of water
stood at around 500 Km3, which peaked at 3000 Km3 in
the end of the period. Meanwhile, the Change the preposition
at
use
for industrial purpose
remained stable at approximately 100 Km3 in 40 years before it gradually increased to about 500 Km3 in 1980. After that, it accounted Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
to climb
significantly to around 1200 Km3. Change the verb form
climbed
Lastly
, the amount of international water
use
for domestic Wrong verb form
used
aim
unchanged Fix the agreement mistake
aims
by
6 decades, Change preposition
for
which
followed by a moderate growth to about 400 Km3 in the Correct pronoun usage
apply
last
year.
Additionally
, in Brazil
, the consumption
of water
per person was 359 m3, with 26,500 km2 irrigated
land and Change preposition
of irrigated
176
million population. Correct article usage
a 176
On the other hand
, Congo had lower
population than Correct article usage
a lower
Brazil
accounting for 5.2 million, with 100 Km2 irrigated land and 8 m3 water
Change preposition
of water
consumption
per person.Submitted by iamlearner9697 on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, brazil, use, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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