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Some people think that they have the right to use as much as fresh water they want, others believe government should control the use of water as it limited sources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The graph provides information about the
consumption
 of several commodities in European
Country
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countries
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 between 1979 and 2004. These were chicken, beef, lamb and
fish
.
Overall
, Chicken
were
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was
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 the
popular
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more popular
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 food than beef, lamb and
fish
 in term of
grams
 per
person
 per
week
 which showed a gradual increased but
decreased
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 in other commodities throughout the period.
Fish
 and meat
consumption
 had some fluctuation in 1979 and 2004. Beef
consumption
 decreased from just over 200
grams
 per
person
 per
week
 to around 160
gram
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grams
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 in 1979, hitting a high point in 1984 and
continued
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 to
declined
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 rapidly around the period. Lamb
consumption
 decreased from 150
gram
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grams
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 in 1979 to around 50
grams
 per
person
 per
week
 in 2004.
While
fish
 commodity remained fairly stable, hovering at 50
grams
 throughout the period.
In contrast
, chicken
consumption
 rose significantly between 1979 and 2004. Which started from around 140
grams
 per
person
 per
week
 and reached the highest
consumption
around
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 240
grams
 per
person
 per
week
.
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