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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The bar chart given is comparing
pineapple
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 exportation from the top 3 countries in the 2009 and 2019 periods. There is
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 a pie chart to illustrate the percentage of
pineapple
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 cost components in 2019.
Overall
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, not only
Country
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 A was the highest contributor compared to the other two
,
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but,
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it
also
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 extremely raise its productivity in 2019 compared to 10
years
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 before.
Country
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 C was the least in terms of exporting their
pineapple
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. All countries experienced an uptrend in 10
years
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 except
Country
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 B.
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, in 2019 the highest budget needed for every single
pineapple
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 was for distribution and retail. Starting from only 1
million
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 metric
tons
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 in 2009,
Country
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 A significantly escalates its exports up to 11
million
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 metric
tons
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 in 2019. Meanwhile,
Country
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 C has been not much different in 10
years
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 with only producing 0,5-1
million
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 metric in the period. The only
country
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 which decreased its productivity was
Country
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 B, from approximately 5
million
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 metric
tons
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 in 2009 to 1.5
million
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 metric
tons
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 10
years
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 later. The most cost spent for
pineapple
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 was for distribution and retail in 2019. Taxes allocated 4% only amongst the other 6 components which makes them the lowest one.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country, years, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • world pineapple exports
  • top three producing countries
  • 2009
  • 2019
  • breakdown
  • cost to the consumer
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
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