Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some countries achieve international
sports
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by building specialised
facilities
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to train top
athletes
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,
instead
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of providing
sports
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facilities
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that everyone can use. Do you think
this
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is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion. Many countries get
the
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sports
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achievement by developing
its
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apply
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sports
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facilities
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which specifically designed for training top
athletes
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and they ignore to provide
sports
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aminities
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amenities
for
public
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the public
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. In my opinion,
this
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circumstance can bring negative development for
regeneration
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the regeneration
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of
athletes
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and
people
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would be difficult to find open
space
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spaces
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for exercising Having international standard
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sport
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centers
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which are only used for professional
athletes
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will avoid potential
athletes
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to develop their talent. It is because they do not have
place
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a place
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to nurture their skills and potential. It leads
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problem for the government to regenerate their old
athletes
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. Indonesia,
for instance
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, has developed some international football stadiums which are for
international
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an international
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match, but they do not renovate local stadiums which make
public
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the public
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abandon those places.
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, many children who like football change their hobbies into futsal
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sport
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which the fields are
easily
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to find nearby.
Moreover
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,
people
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need to have public spaces for doing their
sports
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activities
such
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as jogging, cycling,
playing
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and playing
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football and basketball which are necessary for bonding with their family or friends. If they have no open spaces they will be more isolated and become
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out or
obesity
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.
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,
government
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the government
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should provide
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sport
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center
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centre
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for
public
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the public
a public
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which can be beneficial for their
well being
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well-being
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.
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, in
Jakarta
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,Jakarta
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the number of open green spaces is
incresead
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increased
in order to facilitate their
people
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to have outdoor activities with their community. In conclusion, providing
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sport
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facilities
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are not only for
athletes
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but for anyone
becuase
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because
it will
enthrall
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more
people
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to do their hobbies which may be they have
potential
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the potential
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to be professional
athletes
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later.
In addition
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, the residents need to have open
space
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spaces
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for interacting with their communities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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