Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some countries achieve international
sports
by building specialised facilities
to train top athletes
, instead
of providing sports
facilities
that everyone can use. Do you think this
is positive or negative development?
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many countries get the
Correct article usage
apply
sports
achievement by developing its
Correct pronoun usage
apply
sports
facilities
which specifically designed for training top athletes
and they ignore to provide sports
aminities
for Correct your spelling
amenities
public
. In my opinion, Add an article
the public
this
circumstance can bring negative development for regeneration
of Correct article usage
the regeneration
athletes
and people
would be difficult to find open space
for exercising
Having international standard Fix the agreement mistake
spaces
sport
Change the noun form
sports
centers
which are only used for professional Change the spelling
centres
athletes
will avoid potential athletes
to develop their talent. It is because they do not have place
to nurture their skills and potential. It leadsAdd an article
a place
a
problem for the government to regenerate their old Change preposition
to a
athletes
. Indonesia, for instance
, has developed some international football stadiums which are for international
match, but they do not renovate local stadiums which make Add an article
an international
public
abandon those places. Correct article usage
the public
Therefore
, many children who like football change their hobbies into futsal sport
which the fields are Fix the agreement mistake
sports
easily
to find nearby.
Replace the adverb
easy
Moreover
, people
need to have public spaces for doing their sports
activities such
as jogging, cycling, playing
football and basketball which are necessary for bonding with their family or friends. If they have no open spaces they will be more isolated and become Correct word choice
and playing
stress
out or Wrong verb form
stressed
obesity
. Replace the word
obese
Therefore
, government
should provide Add an article
the government
sport
Change the noun form
sports
center
for Change the spelling
centre
public
which can be beneficial for their Add an article
the public
a public
well being
. Add a hyphen
well-being
For example
, in Jakarta
the number of open green spaces is Add a comma
,Jakarta
incresead
in order to facilitate their Correct your spelling
increased
people
to have outdoor activities with their community.
In conclusion, providing sport
Change the noun form
sports
facilities
are not only for athletes
but for anyone becuase
it will Correct your spelling
because
enthrall
more Change the spelling
enthral
people
to do their hobbies which may be they have potential
to be professional Correct article usage
the potential
athletes
later. In addition
, the residents need to have open space
for interacting with their communities.Fix the agreement mistake
spaces
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