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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Once upon a time, there were 4 identical brothers with 4 different T-shirts . Only
one
 of them was more popular than the others. That’s how powerful a
fashion
 super
brand
 is .
Fashion
brands
 are now a kind of
passly
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passively
pass
 buy. It is shown by the monitor that the pressure in
brain
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 lights up when a customer sees expensive
hand bags
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unlike
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the
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cheap ones Louis Witton is a clothing shop that was started in Paris. It expands all over the world. In a pyramid, you will see exclusive, limited
amount
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products
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. For
second
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 stage , we have the middle range
that is
 very well-made .
Then
, we have the bottom range where the money comes in .Alex went to the temple of the sunglasses factory in Italy
that
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 from
the
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whole
operation
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 there were several workers who work there. The materials and variety
machines
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 manufacture different
brands
 of sunglasses. They do
this
 by the
fashion
brand
 which comes to their factory , so they design and readjust them.
For example
, Burberry which is a company of clothing is now so well-known in catwalk shows.
Fashion
 magazines need advertising in order to exist. But on the same level,
fashion
brands
 need
the
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magazines to show the
consume
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of
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what’s available. A lady is inserted
to
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into
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 the MRI scanner to
illustrates
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 when she sees an expensive
hand bag
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handbag
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, a part
in
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 her brain lights up rather
than
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the cheap
one
. Jeans
coming
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come
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 from all kinds of different angles in terms of what their
massage
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message
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 is ,so they show the culture.
People
 actually use their
dress
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 to signal their success in life . In Diesel, after they sent their goods ,
that
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 trousers
sent
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 back to them because they think they were second quality. In
this
 company, the man’s career was destroying the fabrics . He said teenagers and younger
people
 want the jeans
look
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 older and elderly
people
 want the jeans
look
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 younger. The retail
theater
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 is about a highly
sexualize
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 look. The
super dry
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 world is completely made up
the
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 powers of
brands
 especially mega
brands
 come from their ability to build a kind of nuclear glow around the
brand
. They spend a lot of time and money to decide what emotion can
be take
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 and put around that . We want Adidas to associate ourselves with a comic credible paper.
Every
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one
 from
like
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rap stars ,
sports
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people
 and so on have Nike sneakers.
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Nike manufacturing starts its business model by using cheap
labor
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 to make shoes in developing countries and save on costs . The secret of
fashion
brands
 comes from us because there is
no
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not
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 matter whether
some
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someone
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one
buy
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 a fake or an original
fashion
brand
. The fact is that they are universal.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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