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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum.

#museum #home #people #work
I came across a vacancy notice for part-time voluntary
work
 in your museum. I am writing
this
 letter to apply for the vacant part-time voluntary position in your museum. Generally, voluntary
work
 should be encouraged in society which helps in the develop the community or charity
work
.
Moreover
, I have heard a lot about your museum from different media
such
 as newspapers, television and
also
 online, I have seen how great it is and I will be willing to be part of the progress of your company. I have worked as a security guard for my organization for about four years and some months. And we haven't had any record of breaking in or stealing properties. When I am at
work
 I don't get carried away but always focused because being a security officer requires being vigilant at all times. And my service is always 12 hours a day. And
also
 I am always punctual at
work
.
Furthermore
, for more enquires you can contact the head office for my behaviour and recommendation on [email protected]. In place of
work
, we are having some expansion where we will be having certain workers for the watchman position which makes me available three times a week. I will be waiting on your feedback without time wasting. Yours faithfully Alawiye olaoluwa
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