You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing task 1
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The graph underneath describes the number of abroad
students
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and local
students
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in Australia for a decade.
Overall
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, there
are
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is
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inreasing
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increasing
number of overseas
students
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year after year, as you can see, there are fewer commencing
students
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in local universities. Turning to details, starting with 2001 only 20000
students
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were studying abroad and it has been gradually increasing. As we can see, the
amount
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number
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of undergraduates
are
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is
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rised
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raised
risen
sharply between 2004 and 2009.
Then
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, it reached its peak in 2010 at
point
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the point
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of 80000
students
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.
In contrast
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,
students
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, who were studying in native
instituties
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institutions
institutes
, were 400,000, and have been growing up for 6 years, after that, it stayed steady for 4 years.
However
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, commencing
students
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were fluctuated
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fluctuated
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between 2001 and 2008.
Then
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, it steadily decreased. As you can see, there is a big difference between progress and
number
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the number
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of undergraduates studying overseas and in Australia. It can be seen that after years, more and more
students
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are going to study abroad,
however
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, some of them
staying
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stay
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in Australia. In common, there are more
students
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in local colleges than
foreign
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in foreign
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universities.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolments
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • surpassed
  • dominant
  • fluctuations
  • stability
  • growth
  • decline
  • significant
  • notable
  • shift
  • influence
  • predict
  • impact
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