The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
The Diagram illustrates the process of
generates
Wrong verb form
generating
the
Correct article usage
apply
electricity
power through Replace the word
electrical
the
geothermal energy.
Correct article usage
apply
Overall
, the process is involved five stages from supply
of cold Add an article
the supply
a supply
water
to turbine
Correct article usage
a turbine
that is
connected to generator
to produce electricity.
In the first Add an article
a generator
the generator
stage
, cold water
is supplied from the surface to inject walls through the pipeline then
its
is Correct pronoun usage
it
further
transferred to geothermal
zone that consists of hot rocks. After Add an article
a geothermal
the geothermal
go
through the hot rocks, the hot Change the form of the verb
going
water
is supplied into the production wall’s pipeline which is quite wider than the cold water
pipeline.
In fourth
Change the article
the fourth
stage
, the hot water
is sent to condenser
. in that Add an article
the condenser
stage
condenser convert the hot Add a comma
,stage
water
into the form of steam into steam. The Next stage
supply
the steam to the turbine that rotates it with the help of Change the verb form
supplies
connected
generator Correct article usage
a connected
that
is how the electricity is produced with help of geothermal power.Correct pronoun usage
which
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