The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

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The graph illustrates how many

books

were read by both genders at Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014.

Whereas

men

didn't show a decrease since 2011 and overtake

women

in the middle of 2013 in reading. As can be seen,

women

books

than

Correct the article-noun agreement

apply

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men

read less than 2000

books

than

women

in 2011. The number of

books

read by

men

slowly grew from 3000 to 4000,

while

women

’s rate was three times higher from approximately 5000 to over 8000 between 2011 and 2012 Since 2012, the number of

books

read by

men

dramatically rose to 10000 in 2013 and rose up to one level with

women

that a gradual rise between 2012 and 2013.

However

women

’s numbers decline to 8000

while

men

peaked at 14,000

books

Overall

, mostly

women

books

than a man, but

at the end

line

Correct article usage

the line

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graph male values have increased.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

150 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

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gender
reading habits
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significantly
trends
increase/decrease
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period
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graph
public library
books read
Burnaby Public Library
2011 to 2014
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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while other think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

In some developing countries, disabled people are not given proper access to public and private facilities. What are some possible effects of this problem and solutions to it?

Some people believe that it is better language students in small classes. Others think the number of people in the classes doesn't matter Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.