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Some people believe that schools should reward those students who show excellent academic performance while some believe that only the ones who show significant improvement in the grades should be rewarded. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Educational institutions appreciate and award their
students
 for various reasons.
While
 few people argue that schools should only appreciate
students
 who show exemplary academic achievements, others advocate in a contrasting view that they should reward children who present constant rise in their
grades
. In my opinion, the latter view has stronger advantages as it could improve the quality of education and increase the number of
students
 to pass with good
grades
. On one hand, it is widely common for people to appreciate
students
 who score higher marks, but for academic institutions, it seems only to provide the benefit of raising the popularity of their
school
. For an instance, one particular
school
 in the city of Newyork, propagated the high performed
students
' name and their marks in the newspapers, just to show off that their
school
 performed well,
however
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 number of
students
 who passed the examination was roughly below the city\'s average.
On the other hand
, I concur with the opinion that schools should maximise their effort to reward their pupils who are showing remarkable improvement in their
grades
.
Firstly
, it would create massive confidence among
students
 that they are getting appreciated, despite all their odds and problems in the adolescent stage.
Thus
 they could concentrate well on their exams and score well to reach higher
grades
.
Secondly
,I believe that the quality of education is directly proportional to the number of
students
 who pass with good
grades
, not only to a few
students
 who achieve good scores. For example, recently in a remote village near my town, one
school
 showed, an exemplary pass percentage after started giving a small token of appreciation in their term exams for improving their ranks.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that the advantages
such
 as the
overall
 quality and well-being of
students
 outweigh the mere popularity of an educational institution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • excellent academic performance
  • significant improvement
  • motivates
  • aspires
  • intelligence
  • hard work
  • dedication
  • competitive spirit
  • academic success
  • struggle academically
  • perseverance
  • innate ability
  • confidence
  • valued
  • growth mindset
  • inclusive environment
  • holistic education
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