Shops should not be allowed to sell any food and drinks that has been scientifically proved to be bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

What we eat and drink has been known to impact our lives significantly and the measure at which we consume these items have constantly been modified

as a result

of

advancement

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in research and technology. In recent times, some food and

drinks

have been labelled by

scientific

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study

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as being unsafe especially, in relation to

health

. Some schools of thought are of the opinion that these harmful

substances

should not be sold in markets. I strongly agree with

this

proposition as it

is has

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more benefits when compared to the alternative.

Firstly

,

this

reduces the economic effect that will arise from sicknesses and diseases. The human body system functions based on what goes into it.

Hence

, an inflow of good

substances

into the body implies better functioning of the body

whereas

taking in dangerous ones

cause

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ill

health

. When more individuals develop poor

health

because of

this

, the government spends more funds to cater for their

health

which would have been avoided if those

substances

were banned from shops. An example can be seen in the reduction of birth defects recorded

as a result

of the ban on the use of thalidomide.

Secondly

, it

also

promotes the social

wellbeing

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of

the

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society. Some

substances

found in food and

drinks

can negatively influence a person psychologically and socially. These constituents of food and

drinks

may exert their influence by causing poor vision, delusions or irrational thinking in people who consume them and because of

these

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they may engage in crimes

such

as overspeeding, theft, rape and so on. But when these

substances

are prohibited,

the

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access to them is dramatically reduced.

For example

, the banning of marijuana from the market has caused a reduction in

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crimes. In conclusion, I agree that unsafe foods and

drinks

should not be sold in stores because of the deleterious effects

it

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will have on the economy and society.