Shops should not be allowed to sell any food and drinks that has been scientifically proved to be bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

What we eat and drink has been known to impact our lives significantly and the measure at which we consume these items have constantly been modified
as a result
of
advancement
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in research and technology. In recent times, some food and
drinks
have been labelled by
scientific
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study
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as being unsafe especially, in relation to
health
. Some schools of thought are of the opinion that these harmful
substances
should not be sold in markets. I strongly agree with
this
proposition as it
is has
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more benefits when compared to the alternative.
Firstly
,
this
reduces the economic effect that will arise from sicknesses and diseases. The human body system functions based on what goes into it.
Hence
, an inflow of good
substances
into the body implies better functioning of the body
whereas
taking in dangerous ones
cause
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ill
health
. When more individuals develop poor
health
because of
this
, the government spends more funds to cater for their
health
which would have been avoided if those
substances
were banned from shops. An example can be seen in the reduction of birth defects recorded
as a result
of the ban on the use of thalidomide.
Secondly
, it
also
promotes the social
wellbeing
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of
the
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society. Some
substances
found in food and
drinks
can negatively influence a person psychologically and socially. These constituents of food and
drinks
may exert their influence by causing poor vision, delusions or irrational thinking in people who consume them and because of
these
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they may engage in crimes
such
as overspeeding, theft, rape and so on. But when these
substances
are prohibited,
the
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access to them is dramatically reduced.
For example
, the banning of marijuana from the market has caused a reduction in
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crimes. In conclusion, I agree that unsafe foods and
drinks
should not be sold in stores because of the deleterious effects
it
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will have on the economy and society.
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