The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure illustrates how carbonated drinks are made.
Overall
, it can be seen that the process contains five main stages, beginning with
water
cleaning and ending with the packaging of the final product. The process is linear and completely automatic.
To begin
with, raw
water
is cleaned from impurities by a filter and
then
is
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mixed with chemicals.
Next,
there is the second stage of evaporation and carbonation,
water
passes through electric heaters and
then
follows a cooling pipe which brings the
water
into a big tank. At
this
point,
water
becomes carbonated
due to
the carbon dioxide added before. Later, phase three starts and in a mixing
tank
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things
such
as colouring, syrup and flavour are mixed in the
water
, which is filtered one more time before being stored in stage four. Sparkling drinks are filled into both cans and bottles and
finally
, they can be packed to be sent to supermarkets.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Filtration
  • Water softening
  • Chemical treatment
  • Evaporation
  • Cooling pipe
  • Carbonation
  • Carbon dioxide
  • High pressure
  • Syrup
  • Flavor
  • Color
  • Stirring
  • Uniformity
  • Secondary filtration
  • Bottling
  • Canning
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Retail outlets
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