The pie charts provide information about the proportion of three kind of nutrients included in common meals in the USA. These nutrients might be harmful when eaten pretty often.

The pie charts provide information about the proportion of three kind of nutrients included in common meals in the USA. These nutrients might be harmful when eaten pretty often.
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The pie charts provide the percentage of three different nutrients included in common meals in the USA. Which are
sodium
, saturated
fats
and added
sugars
.
Also
, these three nutrients might be harmful when they are eaten in high quantities.
Firstly
,
sodium
and saturated
fats
are consumed the most during dinner, 43% and 37%.
In addition
, in second place comes lunch for both
sodium
and saturated
fats
, 29% and 26%.
Moreover
, at breakfast
sodium
and saturated
fats
seem to be less consumed. Moving on snacks has the highest percentage of added
sugars
, at 42%. But at dinner, added
sugars
are consumed at 23%, not as big as
sodium
and saturated
fats
. For breakfast, the least consumed nutrient is added
sugars
, 16%.
Whereas
added
sugars
are more used as a snack. Breakfast is the least meal
to conclude
these three nutrients. In conclusion, people consume
sodium
and added
sugars
the most at dinner time.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, fats, sugars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • nutrients
  • common meals
  • harmful
  • frequently
  • overview
  • comparison
  • prevalent
  • potential health risks
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • tooth decay
  • sodium content
  • high blood pressure
  • kidney issues
  • healthier meal options
  • modifications
  • public health implications
  • dietary habits
  • consumption
  • excessive
  • analysis
  • inspection
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