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Some People Think It Is Better For A Country’s Economy For People To Spend Money While Others Believe It Would Be Better For People To Save Money Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #country’s #economy #money
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In today's inflation era, it is a debatable issue whether to splurge
money
 or save
money
.There are few folks who are firm believers
of
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 the fact that the cash should be spent as it helps boost
country's
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the country's
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 economy
while
 others oppose
this
 notion and promote saving. In the following paragraphs, both
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arguments will be discussed and a logical conclusion will be provided
at the end
.
To begin
 with, cash flow is an important aspect of
country's
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a country's
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 economy. If the individuals would be spending
money
, a part of it will be
recieved
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received
 by the government as tax.
As a result
,
the
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government officials will be providing better facilities to its
people
 ,eventually ,leading to
better
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a better
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. To
examplify
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exemplify
, there is
high
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a high
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 tax rate in Canada but the
people
 of the nation are provided with free healthcare. So, all in all, it is a win-win situation for both
people
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 and the government. On the flip side,
the
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people
 are motivated to save
money
 which has its own advantages.
The first
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 and foremost is that if
people
 have some savings they do not need to worry in times of emergency situations
such
 as medical
emergency
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emergencies
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,recession and many more.
Also
, the saved
money
 can be invested in various benefitting accounts which could help in buying bigger things
such
 as
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a house
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house
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. For evidence, a number of individuals have been laid off by Google and Amazon these days, it would be easier for them to pay their bills if they have some amount in their savings account.
To conclude
, I believe that both these viewpoints are equally important. As
expenditure
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 is important for a country's economy, the benefits of savings are too great to ignore.
Therefore
, spending and saving should go hand in hand.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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