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Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think the changes have been very positive, while others believe they have been very negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion

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In recent decades,
due to
 many factors
such
 as technological developments or globalisation, the lifestyle in current has changed completely, compared to the past.
Although
 some
people
 suggest that it affects the world negatively I strongly believe that
such
 modifications of modern
lifestyles
 allow individuals to live in a better world.
This
 essay will discuss
this
 view by using examples to support ideas and demonstrate points. On the one hand, the effects of adopting modern
lifestyles
such
 as using personal vehicles or convenient domestic appliances bring significant positive impacts on individuals' lives.
In addition
to
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, the use of technology advancements enables most
people
 to secure safety, convenience, and less time consumption,
whereas
 walking or riding a horse was the only
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 to travel in the past.
For example
, ordering groceries or buying clothes through online shopping on the Internet helps
people
 to utilise the reduced time for business or leisure purposes.
Thus
, it cannot be denied that modern
lifestyles
 adopted
on
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a
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current society are comparatively beneficial for
overall
 aspects of
the
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society.
On the other hand
, some
people
 worry that the changes in
modern
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 era can cause severe health problems.
In addition
 , owing to the introduction of computers, the processing tasks sitting on a chair which causes a sedentary lifestyle has been prevalent for a long period.
This
 circumstance makes
people
 indulgent and lazy, leading to a lack of physical strength because of the sedentary lifestyle.
Therefore
, we should consider prudently negative effects of
this
 trend in our life prudently. In conclusion, even though there are some negative sides
of
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 modern
lifestyles
, in my perspective, as long as
people
 and governments find ways to treat health issues caused by
the
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lifestyles
,
it
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 should be encouraged to apply the benefits in
this
 world.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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