Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think the changes have been very positive, while others believe they have been very negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion

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In recent decades,
due to
many factors
such
as technological developments or globalisation, the lifestyle in current has changed completely, compared to the past.
Although
some
people
suggest that it affects the world negatively I strongly believe that
such
modifications of modern
lifestyles
allow individuals to live in a better world.
This
essay will discuss
this
view by using examples to support ideas and demonstrate points. On the one hand, the effects of adopting modern
lifestyles
such
as using personal vehicles or convenient domestic appliances bring significant positive impacts on individuals' lives.
In addition
to
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, the use of technology advancements enables most
people
to secure safety, convenience, and less time consumption,
whereas
walking or riding a horse was the only
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to travel in the past.
For example
, ordering groceries or buying clothes through online shopping on the Internet helps
people
to utilise the reduced time for business or leisure purposes.
Thus
, it cannot be denied that modern
lifestyles
adopted
on
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a
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current society are comparatively beneficial for
overall
aspects of
the
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society.
On the other hand
, some
people
worry that the changes in
modern
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era can cause severe health problems.
In addition
, owing to the introduction of computers, the processing tasks sitting on a chair which causes a sedentary lifestyle has been prevalent for a long period.
This
circumstance makes
people
indulgent and lazy, leading to a lack of physical strength because of the sedentary lifestyle.
Therefore
, we should consider prudently negative effects of
this
trend in our life prudently. In conclusion, even though there are some negative sides
of
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modern
lifestyles
, in my perspective, as long as
people
and governments find ways to treat health issues caused by
the
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lifestyles
,
it
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should be encouraged to apply the benefits in
this
world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Technological advancements
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Nuclear family
  • Extended family
  • Life expectancy
  • Healthcare improvements
  • mental health
  • Environmental degradation
  • Traditional family structures
  • Industrialization
  • Urbanization
  • Consumption patterns
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