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Smart phones and other similar electronic gadgets have reduced the contact between friends. Discuss how far you agree with this statement.

#phones #gadgets #contact #friends
In
this
 modern era,it is widely recognized that mobiles play a significant role in the globe.
However
,electronic
gadgets
 create
major
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 impact on
socity
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society
,which reduces the contact between
friends
.I totally
agree
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this
 statement and
forthcoming
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i
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 will
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clearly
 explain about
useage
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usage
 of cell
phones
. To commence with,technology has been booming across the world for 20 years.
Moreover
,
smart
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phones
 are mainly
using
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 for working ,studying and making
conversaton
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conversations
 with other peers.
Additionally
,it brings a ton of problems in
community
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the community
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such
 as the distance between amiable
friends
 would be declined and they are not fascinated to make
conversation
 with
face
 to
face
.
For instance
,in the USA majority of citizens are interested to spend
time
 on
phones
 and laptops rather than spending
time
 with family members and
friends
.Which leads to
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numerous problems
such
 as depression and anxiety.
Furthermore
,there have been facing insomnia and
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 problems,because of those
people
 addicted to social media applications and various
gadgets
.
Eventhough
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Even though
,parents are not spending
time
 with their
kinds
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kids
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,they are allocating their
time
 for working with laptops and talking with their co-workers on
smart
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smartphones
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phones
.The way of bonding between
friends
 would be dropped
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everywhere
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every where
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everywhere
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,they like to talk on
phones
 only
instead
 of
physically
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conversation
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in
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 these days only a few
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 of human beings are
intriguing
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 to talk with
friends
through
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face
 to
face
.For
an
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example,in Germany residents are
showing
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 to talk on social media
instead
 of
physical
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conversation
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conversations
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,
becasue
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because
lot
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a lot
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 of
people
 are swamped with their daily work and
they
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don't have that much
of
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time
 to spend with their peers.What is more,civilians way of attitudes are altering towards
gadgets
,once upon a
time
peple
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people
 were talking with their
friends
 at homes,parks and shopping malls.Right now, they are liking to talk on different kinds of
gadgets
such
 as laptops,computers and
ipads
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pads
.
To sum up
,
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 brings detrimental impact on
people
,which creates distance between one person to
other individual
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another individual
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.
Additionally
,only
few
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a few
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 section
people
who
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like to make
conversation
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conversations
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face
 to
face
in
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apply
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these days.
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