The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the ratio of educators teaching in Japan,
Spain
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,
Ireland
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and the
USA
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in 2001 by the hour.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen from the graph that the
USA
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had the biggest
hours
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at each school level
while
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teaching at primary schools in Japan,
Spain
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and
Ireland
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had the same
hours
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. Glancing at the chart reveals that Japan and
Spain
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had the same ratio of
hours
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in Primary and Lower School which is 600
while
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UpperSecondary in
Spain
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was approximately 650
then
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drastically grew to 980 with
Spain
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. Another point is that Primary in
Ireland
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and the
USA
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had a big difference with 600
hours
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for
Ireland
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and
this
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number significantly rose to 850 for the
USA
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.
Next,
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the number of teaching
hours
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in
Ireland
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had improved remarkably in the
USA
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with 800 and about 1050 respectively.
Furthermore
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, Highschool
also
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had a difference in number with
Ireland
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with just 770 at that time and the
USA
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with 1100.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words spain, ireland, usa, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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