The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts the ratio of educators teaching in Japan,
Spain
,
Ireland
and the
USA
in 2001 by the hour.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen from the graph that the
USA
had the biggest
hours
at each school level
while
teaching at primary schools in Japan,
Spain
and
Ireland
had the same
hours
. Glancing at the chart reveals that Japan and
Spain
had the same ratio of
hours
in Primary and Lower School which is 600
while
UpperSecondary in
Spain
was approximately 650
then
drastically grew to 980 with
Spain
. Another point is that Primary in
Ireland
and the
USA
had a big difference with 600
hours
for
Ireland
and
this
number significantly rose to 850 for the
USA
.
Next,
the number of teaching
hours
in
Ireland
had improved remarkably in the
USA
with 800 and about 1050 respectively.
Furthermore
, Highschool
also
had a difference in number with
Ireland
with just 770 at that time and the
USA
with 1100.
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