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Many feel that students today should learn practical skills at school such as car maintenance and managing a bank account. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #skills #school #car #maintenance #bank #account
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suggest
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 that practical skills should be included in school projects. Despite the fact that the acquisition of academic knowledge is essential in schools, I strongly agree that educational institutions have the obligation to cultivate young individuals who are able to handle tasks in daily life.
To begin
 with, it is inevitable that
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academic subjects; including math, science, and biology is crucial for
students
 to have
brighter
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 career in the future.
However
, learning practical knowledge;
such
 as repairing vehicles, and arranging properties, are equally essential
due to
 those capacities could help them adapt
in
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to
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real
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the real
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 world as soon as possible. 
For example
,
students
 who know the basic skill of
reparing
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repairing
preparing
 cars are able to tackle the
emergancy
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emergency
 situation and save lots of money and
times
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time
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.
Moreover
,
a systematic curriculums
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a systematic curriculum
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 of practical skills could demolish the
destinguish
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distinguish
distinguished
 in information derived from different background, it could ensure younger generation have sufficient knowledge to arrange their property wisely and prevent them to fall
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 financial embarrassment.
For example
, the majority of educational schools in Taiwan include
the
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basic accounting as
regular
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a regular
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 subject to help
students
knowing
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 better
of
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how to handle their financial situation
,
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 and the right they have as residents.
To conclude
, there is
not
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no
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 doubt that
students
 should work hard on academic subjects to have
good
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 performance
on
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compuses
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campuses
computers
,
however
, it is
also
 the
obligations
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obligation
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 of teachers to equip
students
 with practical capacity, helping them to tackle the problem in daily life.
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