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the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
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The
two
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 maps display a way to approach a
city
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 hospital in 2007 and after developing in 2010.
Overall
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, the
city
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 hospital has constructed
two
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 new facilities to access their easier which are
two
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 roundabouts and separated parking spots. Looking into the details, it could be seen that the
city
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 hospital is surrounded by a Ring road is remain the same
while
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 the entrance and the existence of the Hospital road have connected to a roundabout on each side and these roundabouts are joined by the bus station.
Moreover
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, in 2007, the bus stops were administrated into six spots and in the next three years, these spots are gathered and changed into the bus station.
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, the parking features of staff and the public have separated into
two
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 places, the public's car parks are located next to a
city
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 hospital meanwhile the staff's car parks settled in the same area on where the right side of the Hospital road.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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