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Some people think that public transport should be free, especially in big cities. Do you think free public transportation will have more advantages or disadvantages?

#people #transport #cities #transportation
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Peoples keep
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 about
mass
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transportation
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fee
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, they think it must be free
especially
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 in
big
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the big
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city
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cities
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. In my opinion, free
mass
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transportation
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 will have more
disanvantages
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disadvantages
disadvantaged
 and I will share the reasons. The first disadvantage
about
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of
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 free
mass
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transportation
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 is
about
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apply
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customer
behavior
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. We know that everyone who
take
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a
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mass
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transportation
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 mostly a worker or student that
need
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needs
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 to
commuting
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 especially in big cities. Free
mass
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tranportation
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transportation
 can increase
a
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the
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 number of
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a thief
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thief
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thieves
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 because everyone can use
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transportation
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 easily.
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, before the
fee
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 is free everyone who
take
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mass
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transportation
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 should pay some price for it and someone who
have
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has
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 a bad attitude like a thief will think twice to pay the
mass
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transportation
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fee
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. But, it will be different if the
mass
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transportation
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fee
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 is free. Bad people like a thief will easily use
mass
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transportation
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 and
doing
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 something bad like stealing other people's
thing
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things
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. The other disadvantage that we can see from
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government
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the government
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 side. We know that
mass
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transportation
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fee
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 is
usefull
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useful
 for the
operation
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cost
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. The
operation
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cost
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 that
coming
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comes
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 from
price
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the price
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 that we should pay for
mass
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transportation
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 will deliver to new facilities or
maintanance
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maintenance
, so it will
be help
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help
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 the
government
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 for cutting the
cost
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 that they should pay.
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example
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 when the
operation
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cost
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coming
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comes
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 from the
mass
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transportation
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 tickets, the
government
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 only pay for 1 billion and can add new facility once a month. But the
government
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 will pay extra for operations
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cost
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costs
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 and might be cutting some facilities if the
mass
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transportation
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fee
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 is free. In
conclution
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conclusion
, there are some disadvantages if
mass
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transportation
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is
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being
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 free. The disadvantages are
people
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people's
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behavior
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behaviour
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 that we cannot control and
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operation
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the operation
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cost
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costs
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 that the
government
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 should pay. So, it will be good if we can drawbacks carefully
about
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apply
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the
mass
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transportation
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fee
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.
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