Some people feel that movies and TVshows are a good way to study history despite their lack of historical accuracy at times. To what extend do you agree?

Some
people
believe that cinema and television shows are good sources for studying
history
regardless of their lack of historical efficiency at times. I strongly disagree with the above statement. The reasons are going to mention below. First and foremost nowadays
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people
's outlook could be broadened.It affects them to learn something about
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t
solve
this
problem,they will face even greater problems in the future.
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