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the bar chart below shows the results of a survey about peoples coffeeand tea buying and drinking habits in five austrialian cities. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comperhensions where relevant.

the bar chart below shows the results of a survey about peoples coffeeand tea buying and drinking habits in five austrialian cities. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comperhensions where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates the results of a survey about people's
coffee
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 and
tea
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 consumption and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Overall
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, it seems that in most cities, people have less desire to buy fresh
coffee
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, they often tend to go to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 for at least a month.
According to
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 the bar chart, in terms of
tea
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 or
coffee
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 consumption in a café,
it is clear that
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 Melbourne has the maximum amount with almost 65 %, and Adelaide has the minimum percentage of usage with a bit little under 50% among their residents. In second place of most trend
tea
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 or
coffee
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 consuming is the bought instant
coffee
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 in
last
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 four weeks, which have the largest share in Hobart with about 55%, and have the smallest share in Sydney with more than 45%.
Furthermore
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, the results about the Bought fresh
coffee
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 illustrate that people in Sydney have the most amount of buying fresh
coffee
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 at approximately 45%, and Brisbane has the lowest percentage of it among the other five cities. It's significant that, only in Adelaide, we can see that, buying instant
coffee
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 have more consumer than going to a café for
tea
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 or
coffee
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.
In addition
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, among the recorded results, the highest percentage belonged to Melbourne in going to a café for
tea
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 or
coffee
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 more than 60%, and the lowest one belongs to Brisbane in using fresh
coffee
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 at almost 35%.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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