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Some people think that study of history is little use to us.others believe that studying history helps us to know the present.discuss both the viewpoints and give your own opinion

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 own country is considered to be less
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, as opposed to other people who think that past
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 of
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 is an essential element to
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discuss
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beleive
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believe
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eventhough
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even though
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 amount of
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history
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knowledge
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 knowing certain facts and figures
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 in the betterment
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of current
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evolved
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 generation to the
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belief
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doesn't
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 new era ,as the way war being
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fought
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history
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age old
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 perspectives is a complete waste of time. On the other side ,knowing
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political background of any place in the world may provide
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 outlook,which will allow
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catergarise
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categorise
 and apply strategies of ancient origin and gain victory
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particular
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 present
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moguls
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bench mark
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 to , how any improvement might be
madeto
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made to
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coclusion
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conclusion
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even though
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parts
in
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the
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history
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beneficial
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knowledge
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, some of the historical methods could hold a valuable position to improve
life
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 for a beautiful world to live
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • historical knowledge
  • analyzing historical events
  • critical thinking
  • evidence-based reasoning
  • contemporary issues
  • practical benefit
  • advancements
  • interpretations
  • biased
  • misunderstandings
  • pragmatic value
  • rapidly changing world
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