The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compared the different levels of women and men in
further
education in the UK between 1970 and 1991, selecting two types of studying: full-time and part-time.
Overall
,
it is clear that
part-time enrolments remained more popular for both sexes over the time frame and the total
number
of female students grew sharply in these thirty years.
To begin
, men and women had a similar upward trend in full-time education
overall
period leading them to the same highest
number
of subscriptions in the ending time. To be more precise, the
number
of men increased steadily reaching a peak of approximately 300
thousand
in the academic year 1990\91,
while
the woman rose sharply from just under 100
thousand
to 300
thousand
between 1970 and 1991.
In contrast
, in part-time education, the
number
of male students fluctuated felling by approximately 100
thousand
at the end
of time,
while
the female students had an upward trend with a peak of nearly 1100
thousand
between 1990 and 1991.
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