Many museum charge admission fees while others are free. Do the advantages of charging people to visit a museum outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, a lot of
people
would love to learn history.
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, many
museums
need
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and other
museums
do not need
pay
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.
However
, what are the benefits of
this
situation, and what are the
drowbacks
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In
this
essay, I will look at both sides and make an effort to draw some
conclusion
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. Let's begin by looking at
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benefits of
museums
free for society.
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is
many
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because many
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people
's historical knowledge will dramatically increase.
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, if
museums
free
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for any individuals, poor
people
can visit
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museum
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too. So,
this
countryʼs illiterate will slightly decrease. The second advantage of
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is
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the museum any time.
Hence
if
museums
do not need money
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people
should not collect money apply
museums
.
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coin has another side. Turning to the other side of the argument, one of the main
negative
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is if
people
do not pay
for
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the museum,
people
will not respect
of
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museums
. After in all
museums
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with
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people
.
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main factor of conflict between individuals.
In addition
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free
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for capita person,
people
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museumsʼs
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owners.
Hence
, owners pay too much money for each exhibit. Unless
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free
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for
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per person, they will
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not take an income.
To sum up
,
museums
are our face for other countries. In my view, I prefer the
museums
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because owners must take an income
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • socioeconomic barriers
  • accessibility
  • visitor experience
  • inclusivity
  • overcrowding
  • indirect revenue
  • maintenance
  • cultural education
  • funding issues
  • community engagement
  • commitment
  • quality assurance
  • regulate visitor flow
  • museum upkeep
  • exhibit curation
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