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Band 3.5

While some feel that GMOs are harmless and are essential to providing the world with an ample supply of food, others argue that GMOs are not safe because they pose serious health risks. Discuss.

#feel #gmos #world #food #health #risks
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In 1950,
human
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the human
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 population reached
to
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6
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billion
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billions
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billion
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of
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people which
requires
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 a massive amount of food
production
. It is true that
such
 a huge
production
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conventional agriculture. Many people considered genetically modified foods as unhealthy which is not altogether correct for some authorities.
This
 essay will discuss the main causes of
this
 problem and possible solutions for it.
Firstly
, the 2 main causes of
this
 problem are
alteration
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 of DNA and
serial
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the serial
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production
 of food without using seeds. Genetic modifications in fruits and vegetables are accepted
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as harmful
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 to many citizens who
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 not enough education to understand
difference
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the difference
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 between modification and agricultural boosters.
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 some boosters
such
 as hormones,pesticides,
chemical
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and chemical
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 fertilizers are directly related to poor health which is not seen
at
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 genetically changed foods. In
additio
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addition
, some people can't stand for seedless harvests which
has
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 an important role in
serial
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the serial
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production
 of a massive
amounth
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amount
amounts
 of food.
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, one of the most popular
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 of banana; the Cavernish
is
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results
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result
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of
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 DNA alteration and
development
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the development
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 of
this
 banana
occured
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occurred
 by seeding without seeds.
Secondly
, education and
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an increase
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 in social awareness can be a solution
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 prejudgments
on
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about
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 genetically modified products. In conclusion, genetically altered foods are considered
as
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unhealthy which is not correct and can be changed easily with proper education
by
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 time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • genetic modifications
  • yield
  • global population
  • resistance
  • pesticides
  • nutrient profile
  • malnutrition
  • long-term health effects
  • biodiversity
  • superweeds
  • productivity
  • food supply
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